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Fade like candlelight
Into the darkness
Not a prayer lost
Availing the shadow
Lingering overhead
Death meets the best
Every king must fall
Souls cannot rule
Through the nothing
Into the light
Not a prayer lost
Availing the darkness
That has become home
Infinitely happy
Over everything
Nothing
Into the darkness
Not a prayer lost
Availing the shadow
Lingering overhead
Death meets the best
Every king must fall
Souls cannot rule
Through the nothing
Into the light
Not a prayer lost
Availing the darkness
That has become home
Infinitely happy
Over everything
Nothing
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In my mind the end is just that the end. So with ending with nothing To add this poem is acrostic.
© 2014 - 2024 JerryLangdon
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Hi, Sean here from We-Poets, FINALLY stopping by with the critique you requested.
Lingering over head
***overhead is one word when used like this
Souls can not rule
***cannot is one word 99% of the time when used this way, feels jarring to see them separated
Cool poem, though I admit I'm not completely sure what it means there at the end. ...Just looked to see if anyone else asked, and they did. That's cool, although I'd suggest you add that to the poem's description, especially since multiple people struggled with your intended meaning.
Best wishes with your writing,
Sean
Lingering over head
***overhead is one word when used like this
Souls can not rule
***cannot is one word 99% of the time when used this way, feels jarring to see them separated
Cool poem, though I admit I'm not completely sure what it means there at the end. ...Just looked to see if anyone else asked, and they did. That's cool, although I'd suggest you add that to the poem's description, especially since multiple people struggled with your intended meaning.
Best wishes with your writing,
Sean